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The Blind Fish and the King by ~muffinface:iconmuffinface:



The Blind Fish and the King


I was made from white light and rippling shadow
I used to flit between the reeds by day.

Once upon a time,
Compelled by the sheen of precious metal,
I was caught on a tiny silver hook.
With a flash of chrome and a hard red
jolt
I was drawn out of weightlessness,
heavy
and struck by the sun.
Salty, coarse hands gripped me,
and tore my mouth from the line.
I couldn’t move. I had no breath
I couldn’t swim – I gasped for air –
I pleaded with my eyes.
The sun shone bright
off my scales
And lit up the face of my captor
A hard bargain in his stare – Give me what I ask for.
– Anything you want
– How many things?
– One.
– More!
– Two!
– More!
– Three! Anything you want. Take my scales, take my fins, take my gills.

Three things.

Father, Son, Holy Spirit.
Sun, Moon and Stars.
Larry, Curly and Moe.  A trinity.  A tricycle.


He asked for a trident.


All the water left in me welled to my round, vacant eyes.

I saw him gleam gold as I struck the surface
with a stupid slap
Surrendering water
Up and over the sides
of his boat
©2005-2009 ~muffinface
:iconmuffinface:

Author's Comments

This was written for a Gender Studies class. I was told to write a fairy tale. Here it is.

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:icontravcorp:
very odd, and quite different.

i like it.
:icontaliesin1016:
very good--it's rare to hear a narrative poem nowadays.

Father, Son, Holy Spirit.
Sun, Moon and Stars.
Larry, Curly and Moe. A trinity. A tricycle.

you might consider revising this... it seems like "A trinity. A tricycle." might fit better on its own line... then again, that would ruin the whole three-line stanza you have going on there. i dunno. nevermind.

good job.

--
'This is the treason of the artist: a refusal to admit the banality of evil and the terrible boredom of pain'--Ursula K. LeGuin.
:iconmuffinface:
thanks for the feedback, it's great to not just hear "interesting poem, I likes" or something.
I guess I stuck "A trinity. A tricycle." on the end, not because of the three-line stanza (I didn't even realize that was going on before you pointed it out, cool!) but because "Larry, Curly and Moe." is trivial and it's meant to be. The king could wish for anything. a trinity or a tricycle. big or little. i didnt want the three stooges to jump out at the reader, if that makes sense.

thanks again for the groovy comment :)

--
and crawling on the planet's face, some insects called the human race. lost in time and lost in space, and in meaning.
:icontaliesin1016:
you're welcome. when i have something to say that means something.....

--
'This is the treason of the artist: a refusal to admit the banality of evil and the terrible boredom of pain'--Ursula K. LeGuin.
:icondrfinklestein:
i agree i actually think it should be
a trinity.
a tricyle.
it might add more drama.
but what do i know :D

you made me feel like i was a fish.
thats how i know it's a good piece. ;)

--
hand me my leather

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